Kia ora! I am a Year 7 student in Room 5 at Ahipara School, in the Far North of New Zealand. My teacher is Ms Peters. This is where I share my learning. Please leave a positive, thoughtful, helpful comment.
Hi Madison I really loved your writing. I could imagine myself in a traffic jam trying to get home. It reminded me of why I live here and not in a city. You must have spent a lot of time in traffic jams to be able to write such a descriptive piece of work. What cities have you lived in?
Kia ora Madie, ko Ms Peters toku ingoa. Nō te kura o Ahipara ahau. I enjoyed reading your Show, don't tell writing. I like the descriptive way you wrote and the way it made me imagine what you were writing about. To be better than before (BTB) maybe you could add backgrounds to slides . Keep up the good effort! Mā te wa.
Hi Madie I really like your slide about Show don't tell. It is so cool! Maybe next time you could Check your spelling. Keep up the good work. By Kahurangi, from Ahipara School.
Hi Madison, Tabby here. Great job on this blog post! You did really good description and your work was presented well. I liked the writing fonts you used and I think you did a great job. Maybe next time you could use a font that is easier to read? Keep up the good work.
Hi Madison I really loved your writing. I could imagine myself in a traffic jam trying to get home. It reminded me of why I live here and not in a city. You must have spent a lot of time in traffic jams to be able to write such a descriptive piece of work. What cities have you lived in?
ReplyDeleteHi Alison i have only livied in one in aussie
DeleteKia ora Madie, ko Ms Peters toku ingoa. Nō te kura o Ahipara ahau.
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed reading your Show, don't tell writing. I like the descriptive way you wrote and the way it made me imagine what you were writing about. To be better than before (BTB) maybe you could add backgrounds to slides . Keep up the good effort! Mā te wa.
Hi miis peters thank you for your feed back and feed forward I will definietly use it next time
DeleteHi Madie I really like your slide about Show don't tell. It is so cool! Maybe next time you could Check your spelling. Keep up the good work. By Kahurangi, from Ahipara School.
ReplyDeleteHi kahu thank you for your feed back and feed forward Iwill definietly use it next time.
DeleteHi Madison, Tabby here. Great job on this blog post! You did really good description and your work was presented well. I liked the writing fonts you used and I think you did a great job. Maybe next time you could use a font that is easier to read? Keep up the good work.
ReplyDeleteHi tabby thank you for your feed back and feed forward i will definietly use it next time
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