Kia ora! I am a Year 7 student in Room 5 at Ahipara School, in the Far North of New Zealand. My teacher is Ms Peters. This is where I share my learning. Please leave a positive, thoughtful, helpful comment.
Kia ora Madie, I really liked your 'Deconstructed recount' blog post because of the way you described your holiday using Show, Don't tell. I also enjoyed your post because you explained details and when you said 'I heard waves crashing and the bike engine running and cows mooing ...' I could see a picture of those things in my head. Maybe next time you could add more detail, check your spelling and proofread. Nice work Madie, keep up the great effort! Ms Peters.
Kia ora Madie it´s Dylan, I enjoyed readying your recount it was very descriptive. Maybe next time you could say what you had to do to make it. Anyways keep up the great work, blog ya later.
Kia ora Madie, I really liked your 'Deconstructed recount' blog post because of the way you described your holiday using Show, Don't tell. I also enjoyed your post because you explained details and when you said 'I heard waves crashing and the bike engine running and cows mooing ...' I could see a picture of those things in my head. Maybe next time you could add more detail, check your spelling and proofread. Nice work Madie, keep up the great effort! Ms Peters.
ReplyDeleteKia ora Madie it´s Dylan, I enjoyed readying your recount it was very descriptive. Maybe next time you could say what you had to do to make it. Anyways keep up the great work, blog ya later.
ReplyDeleteKia ora Madie, it's Alice. Good job I liked your background. Maybe next time
ReplyDeleteyou could put it into paragraphs. Keep up the great work! Blog you later